Interesting sculptures and good use of color overall, but you need to make stronger compositions / cameras overall.
#1: composition is too heavy on the right; the angle makes us miss the entire middle, which it looks like may be the most interesting part of your sculpture; the “grass” is distracting – simplify it; the lighting is very flat – consider adding a cast shadow on your light; fix the composition. I do like how the background color changes from left to right.
#2: really interesting things happening with light here! Great job, BUT.. the composition is very off balance – the negative space is not used well, and the model is cropped in odd places – work on the camera angle.
#3: This is really close to a strong composition, but notice how the vertical lines in the top are slightly leaning to the right and that small dark brown piece is in the uppermost corner? – that is leading our eye out there, so even though you’re allowing the negative space to help balance on the left, the camera needs slight repositioning and rotation to keep our eye in. Good job and colors though! Very close!
#4: There is a lot of texture in the grassy foreground, but it takes up nearly a third of the bottom – perhaps move up the camera slightly to just see the tips of the grass. Also, it competes with the sculpture – the green is too flat – you need some shadows in that green shape to give it form – also, why green? Is that the best choice with the orange/yellow orb? Consider a slight move to the right overall in the composition too. Nice texture on the orb.
#5: There is a beautiful thing happening with that blue light, but we barely see it because the sculpture uses such a small portion of the image – get in their closer, give a little more space around the bottom and less around the top and let us enjoy the subtle colors in the piece. Also, those vertical pipes could make lovely shadows.
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Danny,
Interesting sculptures and good use of color overall, but you need to make stronger compositions / cameras overall.
#1: composition is too heavy on the right; the angle makes us miss the entire middle, which it looks like may be the most interesting part of your sculpture; the “grass” is distracting – simplify it; the lighting is very flat – consider adding a cast shadow on your light; fix the composition. I do like how the background color changes from left to right.
#2: really interesting things happening with light here! Great job, BUT.. the composition is very off balance – the negative space is not used well, and the model is cropped in odd places – work on the camera angle.
#3: This is really close to a strong composition, but notice how the vertical lines in the top are slightly leaning to the right and that small dark brown piece is in the uppermost corner? – that is leading our eye out there, so even though you’re allowing the negative space to help balance on the left, the camera needs slight repositioning and rotation to keep our eye in. Good job and colors though! Very close!
#4: There is a lot of texture in the grassy foreground, but it takes up nearly a third of the bottom – perhaps move up the camera slightly to just see the tips of the grass. Also, it competes with the sculpture – the green is too flat – you need some shadows in that green shape to give it form – also, why green? Is that the best choice with the orange/yellow orb? Consider a slight move to the right overall in the composition too. Nice texture on the orb.
#5: There is a beautiful thing happening with that blue light, but we barely see it because the sculpture uses such a small portion of the image – get in their closer, give a little more space around the bottom and less around the top and let us enjoy the subtle colors in the piece. Also, those vertical pipes could make lovely shadows.
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